Essay Topic- The term: Sticks and stones may break my bones, but words can never hurt me. Is this statement true? Use life experiences, stories you know/find, famous quotes to support your argument… You should have taken some time to think about your essay topic. In your own words, rewrite the topic. Essay Topic: People hurt me physically is worse than they hurt me verbally. In my opinion, this statement is not true. Next, you will begin to formulate your thesis. Your thesis statement should be provable, not just a statement of fact. Also, remember that each of your quotes and examples (of which you will have 3) need to support your thesis.
Make sure you choose a point that you can refer back to throughout the essay. Thesis Statement: Sticks and stones may break your bones, but verbal abuse destroys a person’s self-esteem, which is more detrimental than a broken bone, which mends. Bones heal back, but even you have time to heal I -You should use the Funnel Method when constructing introductory paragraphs. Start with a broad idea that connects to your topic. Then provide the necessary background information from the story to introduce the topic and the examples you will use to prove your argument. Finally, you will end with your specific and provable argument – your thesis.
Topic sentence: Most of the people have been in a situation where someone said, “you are so stupid,” or “you are a failure” to them. And most of the people have been in a situation where everyone around them called them a “sucker” or something even worse. Those words hurt, not physically like sticks and stones may hurt you, but mentally and emotionally. Summary Info/Background: “Sticks and stones may break my bones, but words can never hurt me. ” Have you ever stopped to actually think about this sentence? Is it true? For many people, no, it isn’t. It’s absolutely not. What others say to them can be very hurtful. Example: 1.
Seriousness of bullying and verbal abuse. 2. Comparison between physical pain and emotional pain. 3. Effects of bullying last for a long time. THESIS II – Body Paragraph 1 will include 1) a topic sentence that connects your example to your thesis, 2) an example (written in your own words), 3) a quote that supports your example and connects to your thesis, 4) a full explanation of the quote/connection, and 5) a sentence that transitions your reader to your next paragraph and example. Topic sentence #1: All types of bullying resulted in lower self-esteem, especially verbal abuse. Example #1: Seriousness of bullying and verbal abuse.
She was called “a liar”, “a fat whore. ” She was insulted and bullied that she suffered enormous pain from cyber bullying. She felt there was no way out. Eventually, all of these led to her death. She hanged herself with a belt in her room at age 13. She is Megan Meier. A poor girl who chose to end her life because of being bullied. And what led her to make this decision was not only because of things just happened to her, but also things that happened when she was 8. By the third grade, other kids called Megan fat and ugly. At that time, this eight-year-old little girl hated herself for the first time.
Her self-esteem was damaged and she is no longer as confident as before. “She talked about suicide,” Mrs. Meier said, “and she would receive weekly counseling and an evolving list of medications as treatment. ” And now, five years later, by the time Megan reached seventh grade, she was overweight. She favored clothes such as Hollister and Abercrombie & Fitch just like other girls may love, however, she didn’t dare to wear them. Her low self-esteem and self-confident made she thought that didn’t deserve those nice clothes because of her weight. Such thing also happens to celebrities like Kelly Osbourne.
Citation: http://www. nytimes. com/learning/teachers/featured_articles/20071218tuesday. html Quote #1: “I was called fat and ugly in the press almost my entire life. I understand that being judged by others comes with the territory, but it broke my heart and ruined my self-esteem” (Kelly Osbourne) Explanation of quote #1/Connection to thesis Verbal abuse is often more difficult to identify than physical abuse as there are rarely any visible scars. However, verbal abuse damages people’s self-esteem, which is much more dangerous, and this takes longer to heal than a broken bone or a bruise.
The intent of verbal abuse is often to be rude, offensive, and slanderous. And it can and will ruin and destroy an individual’s mind and deeper inside, their soul, which is tough and arduous to fix and heal. More importantly, the harm that caused by verbal abuse might lead to suicide or self-harm. Transitional Sentence #1: More importantly, the effects remained by verbal abuse can proceed for a lengthy time, which may lead to further problems in a victim’s adulthood. III – Body Paragraph 2 will follow the same format as Body Paragraph 1. You will use your second example and quote to support your thesis.
Topic sentence #2: A broken bone takes less time to heal than emotional pain does. Example #2: Broken bones take different amount of time to heal, and that amount of time usually depends on the type of bone broken, the age of the person, and the way in which the bone is broken. However, in general, small broken bones take about four weeks to heal in small children. In teenagers and adults, small bones like a finger or wrist bone will take about six weeks to heal. Larger broken bones, for example the bones in the thigh, would take longer to heal, usually six weeks to three months in the average healthy adult.
(http://www. wisegeek. com/how-long-do-broken-bones-take-to-heal. htm) However, it seems like emotional pain takes longer to heal than physical pain such as a broken bone. Kellie Anne Hope is woman who ended her 15-year relationship with her husband 2 years ago because of verbal abuse. She was always called “fat,” “lazy,” “stupid,” “disgusting,” or “hopeless” by her husband. And then, she started to believe it. She started to believe that she was no longer beautiful that she literally didn’t matter. She was hurt by what her husband called her; she was hurt by verbal abuse.
“I was constantly walking on eggshells, trying to keep him happy, but everything I did appeared to be wrong. He was constantly criticizing everything I did – the way I dressed, my friends, my hobbies, the way I cooked, even the way I walked; he called me elephant legs because he said I stomped around the house. ” Kellie said. Her self-esteem was damaged, was destroyed. For 15 years, she was always trying to heal the “scars” inside her heart and her mind. However, it was incredibly hard to free her from the abuse. Finally, she decided to get divorce with her husband 2 years ago.
(http://www.bodyandsoul. com. au/soul+happiness/relationships/verbal+abuse+can+leave+scars+,7587) Quote #2: “It is the put-downs, name calling, insults, belittling and critical statements that have the most serious and long-lasting effect on self-esteem as these messages keep repeating in the victim’s mind, years after the bruises have healed. ” (http://www. bodyandsoul. com. au/soul+happiness/relationships/verbal+abuse+can+leave+scars+,7587) Explanation of quote #2/Connection to thesis Verbal abuse brings the victims long-lasting effects, which often take much longer to heal than a broken bone.
Sometimes those effects may not disappear due to the total destruction of a person’s self-esteem, which is more dangerous than a broken bone, which mends. Transitional Sentence #2: This is more dangerous than a broken bone, which mends, because verbal abuse often causes scores of serious problems. IV – Body Paragraph 3 will follow the same format as Body Paragraphs 1 and 2. You will use your third example and quote to support your thesis. Topic sentence #3: Researches and studies show that effects of bullying last for a long time. Example #3: Effects of bullying last for a long time.
The intent of the research is to test whether being bullied in childhood will cause mental problems and suicide in young adulthood after accumulating mental problems in childhood. And after the whole process of testing, the study shows that victims of bullying were more likely to suffer from psychiatric disorders and family hardships. After studying the subjects of psychiatric problems and family hardships, they “found that victims continued to have a higher prevalence of agoraphobia, generalized anxiety, and panic disorder and that victims were at increased risk of young adult depression, panic disorder, agoraphobia, and suicide.
” (http://archpsyc. jamanetwork. com/article. aspx? articleid=1654916) Quote #3: “The effects of being bullied are direct, pleiotropic, and long-lasting, with the worst effects for those who are both victims and bullies. ” Explanation of quote #3/Connection to thesis Influences of bullying and verbal abusing can persist for years after the insulting, which will directly affect the victim’s future life in several ways such as psychiatric disorders, hardship in dealing with relationships with others, and extra. Transitional Sentence #3:
The efficacy of verbal abuse is more vicious than those left by physical harm because they take longer to heal and more importantly, they may lead to self-harm and suicide. Also, inappropriate using with words can cause abundance problems not only in the victims’ childhood, but it will also make progresses to their adulthood. V – Your conclusion should do the following things: restate your thesis, readdress your three examples that support your argument, and leave your reader with an additional idea to think about. Thesis Re-Statement:
Unlike the scars and bruises left by physical harms, which mends, verbal abuse destroys a person’s self-esteem, which is more destructive than a broken bone. Examples of supporting evidence: 1. Seriousness of bullying and verbal abuse. 2. Comparison between physical pain and emotional pain. 3. Effects of bullying last for a long time. Thought with which to leave your reader: Be aware with using words because words do hurt, and they can even kill a person. Don’t be a murderer. Peer Editor’s Name:| YES/NO? Feedback| Teacher Feedback| YES/NO? Feedback| Thesis statement is identifiable, persuasive, relevant, and supportable.
| | Thesis statement is identifiable, persuasive, relevant, and supportable. | | There is a clear example in each body paragraph that supports the thesis statement. | | There is a clear example in each body paragraph that supports the thesis statement. | | Quote clearly supports the example and connects the example and the thesis. | | Quote clearly supports the example and connects the example and the thesis. | | Conclusion restates thesis, restates three examples, and leaves the reader with an additional thought. | | Conclusion restates thesis, restates three examples, and leaves the reader with an additional thought. | |